zeekie: take two.

It isn't very often that a bland manuscript outline suddenly becomes creepy and hilarious at the same time. Enjoy.

(Assume sics, of course.)

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It is the morning after an Otherworldly Activities Office (OAO) stake-out by Jordan and other officers -- all teens, because the mentalic ability necessary to affect demons fades with age. Retribution, karmic rebound brought about by use of psionic powers, begins. Normally Retribution consists of severe nausea, headaches, and inability to use mentalic power; this Retribution goes wrong, and a bloodfiend demon pops into existence and slaughters Jordan's parents. Jordan, by lashing out at the monster, inadvertently collapses his house and awakens in the OAO infirmary.

The OAO tells Jordan that he will live with two people who have retained their psychic abilities into their fifties, which is a phenomenon.

After his first day at a new high school, Jordan notices a golden eagle soaring overhead. The eagle exudes an odd glamour which piques his interest. He treks into nearby woods to track it down.

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Neesy, granddaughter of a preacher in the last pocket of society on the demon-overrun world of Gailoam -- the world from which Earth's demons emanate -- finds a bloodfiend waiting in her room when she returns home from church, and in an uncontrolled display of magic she obliterates it. This concerns the church's elders, and they decide to test her to figure out whether the magic she used was Hurr-approved or Minter-spawned.

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jordan is now himself on Gailoam, though he doesn't know it. He just knows that what had been a line of trees by the road has become a forest crawling with demons. He has lost his mind-blasting ability and does not know why. He meets a little girl named Reva, who calls him her big brother and says that she has been looking for him. Jordan has no idea what she is talking about, but allows her to lead him to her home. They barely make it to Hurr's Hope, Reva's village -- and Neesy's.

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Neesy passes the elders' test, demonstrating amazing magical prowess in the process, and the church elders induct her into their number by raping her. Her grandfather is the one to take her virginity -- fulfilling Neesy's secret fantasies, and shattering them in the process -- and then the rest join in. Neesy tries to kill them with her newfound power, but they are many and they are strong.

After violating every orifice, they tell her that she is the second coming of their god, Hurr.

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And then the rape, and the violation of every orifice, and the taking of her virginity by her grandfather, the last of which was apparently secretly longed for - none of these are ever mentioned again, and nor do they play any role in shaping her character. The End.